Rough Cut Feedback & Evaluation

Now that the rough cut is completed, we can now move onto the feedback that we have received from our peers and most importantly, the age group from out target audience. This will help us understand what needs improving and what other suggestion that we can receive to ensure that the film can have the highest level of quality

Here are the different feedbacks that we received and our responses to them.

Questionnaire

We gave a questionnaire to people who are in our target audience for them to fill out after watching our rough cut.

We asked the following questions:

• Are you aged between 15-24?
• What are your first initial reactions to the film? Liked it? Didn't? Why?
• Did you understand the plot line?
• What do you think about the style of the film at the beginning? Any improvements?
• Are there any moments you did not like?
• Any improvements we can make that you think would be useful for us to know?

Looking from the feedback above, we now understand that we have to reshoot the shot in which the two Hermit are looking at each other as it ruins the effect of the film. We also understand that improvements with sound must change.

This response also suggest that we need to alter the volumes and sounds of the short film.

This response suggests that the brightness on the final scene is too bright so in order to change this, we will either re shoot this scene or alter the colouring of the scene so the brightness is dimmed.

                      

This feedback also suggests that we have to change the scene where the two Hermits are looking at each other. Now that more of audience can see this problem, we understand that this is an issue that must be solved.

Survey Monkey

We created a survey monkey with the same questions as the questionnaire but asked a difference audience to answer our questions, this time anonymously so they can give any feedback they would like without us knowing who wrote what, which may lead to having more honest answers.

Q1:

This shows that everyone who completed this survey is in our target audience range.

Q2

This shows that the majority of our target audience really enjoyed Life of Hermit.

Q3

This shows that our target audience understands the plot of the short film.

Q4

While the majority liked most of the short film, some believe that the sounds were a little quite so it was difficult for them to understand the plot. 

Q5

The majority of our target audience loved the style of the short film however one believes that the sound must improve.

Q6

One of the improvement that have been suggested is that Hermit should be more clear when narrating the film as this is mainly due to the low volume of the narration. Another suggestion is that the scene in which the two Hermits are facing each must be altered so they have the same height.

Class Feedback

Our classmates and teacher watched our short and gave us feedback on ways we can improve, or if they see anything wrong, or anything that will look better with our film. This is extremely helpful because feedback from peers who are making their own film, and also study media who have experience they will have a better idea on how to improve our film both creatively and with the editing to make it better quality.

"I liked it when hen he is doing the narrative at the end and it is setting the scene."

"The bedroom is pink, the walls are pink etc, and its more of a representation of a girls bedroom than boys." 

• The bedroom is actually red, but we want to subvert the stereotype that pink is for girls and blue is for boys. Our characters emotions are both male and female showing how some emotions are seen as more feminine that others, and some more masculine, so by this we are subverting the stereotype that all males don't have "girly" emotions, or females don't have "manly" emotions. Hermit having a pink room is showing that he doesn't conform to the masculine stereotype and is not your stereotypical teenage boy.

"When they are doing spin the bottle and the camera is going round are we suppose to see Dave's (Hermit) fingers going round and round quickly, because you can see its sped up. A bit jolt at times?"

• We had a problem overall with that shot, we had to speed it up because it was too slow and time consuming, but we wanted it to hold on Hermit, but because we didn't have any footage of where it is held on him completely still we had to try and slow the clip down at the end. This caused some problem as Hermit's fingers were moving, so we added the clip over the top but didn't speed it up, but this shows a clear divide from the sped up clip to the slowed down. But we are now aware that we will be able to slow the clip down at the end instead of adding a clip and will be doing that.

"I really like the sound track, how it starts and gradually changes trough each scene, but there is a bit of a gap in the music at one point."

"I think you need a more natural yawn at the start because it sounds a bit false."

• We are either going to record the actor yawning, and over dub it with that. Or we may be taking out all the digetic sound out as suggested later on in this video. We are going to experiment and then see what we prefer in the final cut editing process.

"When he is getting pushed up the lockers he is smiling a bit, obviously he would be scared and not smiling."

• We are aware of this problem and we tried many attempts but the actor smiled in a variety of shots.

 "When you see him standing there the first time there is a cleaners box, and when you see him the second time there isn't. So bit of a continuity error."

"The credits at the end maybe you should put the masks emotions and not just mask 1, 2, 3 etc."

• We were originally going to do this, but we didn't have time to list the masks but in our final cut editing process we are going to be changing this.

"Whats that random noise in the soundtrack?"

• The sound is from the soundtrack, we tried to fade it out but you can still clearly hear this noise, so we are going to either shorten the music or try to fix it some other way but shortening other clips.

"You know the clicking when they're eating the popcorn, is that the popcorn?"

• The noise you hear is from the cinema projector soundtrack because we didn't want the sound of the mask putting their hands in the popcorn. We will use a different part of the cinema projector soundtrack for this in order to change it.

"When the actor is there and not there, the actor holds it really well"

"Does the actor in the red change? Like is that different person because the hair length changes."

• Yes the red masks hair changes because it is not suppose to be a person, but an emotion. The mask is a different persons emotions from Hermits. We are working on ways we can make this more clear for the audience. 

"The crane shot at the end is really good, but it would be better if it finished when Dave is still in shot, or if he full leaves the shot."

• We are thinking about re-filming this scene, but there may be some issues and we feel if we can't re film we will edit it the screen goes blank when Dave is completely out of shot.

"The volumes on some of the sounds need some changing,"

• We are aware of the volume changes, either in the music or the narrative and will work on this during the final cut editing process.

Interview

We got a few people who are in our target audience and we asked them questions for our feedback and recorded it. The questions we asked:

• What were your first impressions of the film?
• What was your favourite moment?
• What was your opinion on the soundtrack?
• What was your least favourite part of the film?
• What elements of the film would you improve?

Overall, looking from the audience feedback, the majority of our target audience really likes our film and with, we couldn't be more satisfied with what we have achieved. However from this, there are many helpful suggestions that were given by our target audience that we can we use to improve Life of Hermit. Two of the main suggestion that was constantly given to us was to re shoot scene 6 as the effect of the two Hermits looking doesn't good as one is closer to the camera than the other and to adjust the sounds so Hermit's narration can be clearly heard.

Now that we know what we need to improve, we have made a schedule so we can make sure that most of our suggestions made from our target audience are met therefore the quality of the short film will improve.

Improvment Final Cut

Now that we have our audience feedback, we will now begin to re shoot and edit Life of Hermit for the final cut.

Rough Cut

After 5 days of editing, we have finally completed the rough cut for Life of Hermit.

So here it is, the rough cut of Life of Hermit:



Now that the rough cut is finished, we are now able to receive audience feedback of the short film and use this to alter and improve the overall quality of Life of Hermit. In my next post I'll be showing all the audience that we have received and our response to them.

Editing - Day 5

When: Monday 19th January 

What: Narration, Titles and Credits

Who: Daniel, Tilly Robbie

Evaluation

We begun with the narration and we changed all the volumes depending on the volume in which Dave spoke. Some clips he spoke louder, or quieter than others so we changed volumes. Then because in the clips you can hear the ambience we decided that we would extend the clips so we have silent ambience at the start and end at clips, and then we have faded the volume in so when listening the volume slowly increases.

Fading in of the volume on the clip.

We then started to create the title for our film. We started by experimenting with different fonts to see which one worked at which ones didn't:

We then realised that we wanted to use our Target audience films titles as our audience would find this more appealing. 

Font:

After looking at the three fonts, we decided that we liked 'The Way Way back' font style the most. We liked the tall, thin letters. So after trying to research the font they used it wasn't on Final Cut Pro X, so we looked trough the fonts and found one most similar: Apple LiGothic.

Style

When estimating with the fonts, we decided that we didn't want all words on the same line as the target audience films didn't use this style. We liked the 'Cheaper by the Dozen' style of how the 'Cheaper' and 'Dozen' were larger under one another, and then 'of the' was smaller to the side.

We chose a font size for 'Life' and 'Hermit' and positioned them under each other so the L and H were in line. Then we decided we would have 'of' in small capitals and changed the font size so it was smaller, then positioned it at the bottom of 'e'.

                                                 

                                               

Then we chose the font colours. We decided we wanted Black and white, but when we finished choosing the font and style we then thought it looked too plain. We wanted to add colour, we liked how 'Frank' has a bold colour like pink and how it is outlined. 

So we added an outline on our title. We decided to use the colour blue as this is used a lot in our film to represents Hermits personality, and at a significant point in the film at the end Hermit is seen wearing blue.

In order to get the film credits at the right order, we decided to compare our credits with a real short film that includes the same conventions as Life of Hermit. We looked at the short film 'Depression' as it included a main character with the same personality as Hermit and relies on masks to create a message to the audience. Adding the credits didn't take very long achieve as we knew the order for the crew & cast so all we had to do was to add everyone onto the credits and to makes sure the speed of the credits isn't too fast or else the audience wouldn't be able to read the credits.

Overall we are proud of what we've done for the rough cut of Life of Hermit and although there are some issues with the sound of the short film, we are prepared to alter the film from the response of the audience feedback.

Now that both the shooting on location and editing is completed for the rough cut, we are now able to asses each other on how we acted during this stage of production, This is a good way of showing what each member thinks of each other as we are willing to be more honest in a peer assessment. 

Here are the results of the peer assessment:  

Editing - Day 4

When: Thursday 15th January
What: Scene 6
Who: Dan, Robbie & Tilly

Evaluation:

On this day we started off editing the reveal scene, as the feedback we got from our rough cut for this shot suggested that we should crop it slightly in order to make it look more effect. Also we had to make adjustments on the shot that shows Hermit by himself in the cinema as the original shot was criticised for being to long. Finally we had to try and improve the last shot in our film which is the crane shot of Hermit sat in the park as there was a few minor problems that was identified during the rough cut feedback.

This image shows us cropping the height of this shot so that the ceiling is not visable. This was easy to achieve as it was just the matter of cropping it down to the appropriate length.

Once we had finished cropping this shot, we then had to begin shortening the rest of the shots that feature in this scene so that our film was a maximum of 5 minutes long including our ident, title and credits. The purpose of this was to shorten the shots and to show the difference between Hermits mornings.

Here are just a few examples of the differences between the first shot with Hermit and his friends and the shots without his friends.

Now that we finished that part of the short film, we decided to edit the last scene of Life of Hermit. This scene wasn't very difficult to edit as we already knew the timing of where to cut each shot as we already planned each timing when we filmed this scene. At the end of this scene, we added a fade out so when it comes to adding the credits, this shot will fade at the right point when the credits role.

Here is the last shot of  Life of  Hermit.

Now that we finished editing all the scenes, we are now ready to move onto the narration, titles and credits for Life of Hermit.

Editing - Day 3

When: Wednesday 14th January

What: Edit the scenes 4 and 5 for the rough cut.

Who: Tilly, Daniel, Robbie

Evaluation

We decided to only edit scenes four and five of Life of Hermit today as we didn't want to overload on work or else it will demotivate us to carry on editing and overall decrease productivity so we decided to perfect these two scenes before continuing on the last few scenes.

Firstly, the first two shots of scene 4 was difficult to edit as it was vital for both shots to match as the first one includes the angry emotion pulling Hermit out of the screen and the second shot includes Hermit being pushed into the lockers therefore it was important for both shots to work together so they can create a influential effect on the target audience as it would show how the angry emotion is consuming Hermit. Eventually, we managed to edit these shots efficiently and moved onto the next shot which consists of the angry emotion shoving Hermit aggressively into the lockers. This shot wasn't very difficult to edit however we just had to match Hermit's face from the previous shot to this shot which didn't very long to achieve. The next shot involves Hermit pushing the angry emotion's hands away from him and walks away from the location. This shot also wasn't very difficult to edit however it was also important to match Hermit's face with the previous shot or else it will create a continuity error. From this, we matched Hermit's face in order to prevent this issue.

The next part of the scene involves Hermit in another part of the school, upset from the incident with the angry emotion. This part of the scene wasn't very difficult to edit in as it was just one shot however when we filmed the clip, the happy emotion turned her head towards the camera so we had to make sure that when we edit this shot, her head is facing towards Hermit as there is no point in her turing her head towards the camera as it would ruin the effect of the film. We prevented this issue as we filmed this shot many times and fortunately we found a shot where the happy emotion is looking at Hermit. 

The next scene involves Hermit in his bed with the happy emotion while the calm emotion is sitting by the Hermit's table.  This scene wasn't difficult to edit either because this was just one pan shot but the timing between each straight cut had to be short or else the audience wouldn't find this scene interesting. Eventually, we cut the shot at a length that we believe to be at the right timing.

Overall today was much better then the previous editing day as we only had two scenes to edit therefore we had more time to perfect each scene. On the next editing day, we will be working on the last two scenes of Life of Hermit.

Editing - Day 2

When: Monday 12th January

What: Edit the scenes 1-3 for the rough cut.

Who: Tilly, Daniel, Robbie

Evaluation

We begun editing with first scene which involves Hermit waking up and leaving the house. This was one of the scenes that we were most concerned of when filming as we wouldn't know if the overall scene will be presented well until the actual editing stage. This was because each footage in the scene would be edited into quick, rapid shots from one another so it was vital for each shot to be edited well together or else if it doesn't, then there is the risk that we have to re-film the whole scene again. Fortunately, each shot worked well together in the scene due to editing. At first each shot was edited for too long as this scene ended up lasting over 1.30 minutes and we didn't want this as we needed to fit the 5 minute mark for the overall short film therefore we decided to shorten the length of this scene in order to fit all the other scenes in. This worked to our advantage as the scene looked much smoother then previously and the overall presentation has improved. Once the editing of the shots was complete, we added the foley sounds and soundtrack in the film by using the same diegetic and non diegetic sounds from our animatic.

Here is an example of one of the shots that was used in the first scene.

Now that we completed editing on the first scene of the film, we decided to move onto the next scene. This scene wasn't very difficult to edit in as it was just one continuous tracking shot however the main issue with this scene was adding the foley sounds. The non diegetic music from the previous scene would continue onto this one so that wasn't a problem but adding the foley sounds of all the characters laughing was one as the sound wouldn't match their movements. It was vital to prevent this issue as it would create a continuity error as it would seem that the characters aren't actually making those sounds therefore it would ruin the effect on the audience. Although we didn't have time to record all the actors/actresses laughing, we found a diegetic sound of people laughing that matched with the scene in the short film.

Here is the shot that we used in the second scene.

Next, we was going to produce the title for the film however we decided to leave the title, credits and narration until the end as we wanted to perfect each scene first.

We now moved onto the third scene of Life of Hermit which consists of a dance scene with Hermit and his masked friends as well as all the friends playing spin the bottle. The first part of the scene wasn't difficult to edit in as it was just one continuous shot with only the diegetic sound of music playing throughout the scene. However we found the next few shots difficult to edit in as it begun with the happy masked friend spinning the bottle so it was vital for the next shot to match with who the bottle lands on or else the scene won't look as acceptable and it would overall ruin the effect to our target audience. Once we eventually matched the two shots together, we had to alter the speed of which the camera is moving around each masked friend until it reaches Hermit where it should slow down to suggest that the bottle has landed on Hermit. This was a very time consuming process as either the clip went too fast or it went too slow however we eventually got the shot at the speed we wanted. The last two clips were to edit in as it consists of a tilt shot and a handheld two shot however adding the diegetic sound of the masked friends laughing and clapping from the kiss was difficult to achieve as it was hard to match each sound to the film. After a while, we managed to match all the sounds on the final shot of this scene.

This is how we slowed down the bottle scene when the bottle lands on
Hermit.

Here is the shot when Hermit is about to kiss the happy masked
friend.

Here is how we added all the non diegetic sounds on the scene when
Hermit kisses the happy masked friend.

Overall, this day of editing has been good however quite challenging as we found the diegetic sounds difficult to edit in as we needed to make sure the sounds matched perfectly onto every shot of each scene or else this would ruin the effect to the audience. In day 3, we will be editing scenes 4 and 5.

Editing - Day 1

Now that shooting on location is completed, Laconic Productions can now move onto the editing stage of our film, Life of Hermit.

When: Friday 9th January

What: Going through all of the clips and picking out the best ones and there is a lot of clips so it will take up all of the time.

Who: Tilly, Daniel, Robbie

Evaluation

In order to keep all of our clips well organised, we created a 'Library' in Final Cut Pro X and imported all of our footage on it. From this, we decided to create an 'event' for each scene so it would be easier to identify which clips we need for editing instead of all of the clips in one event as this would've been a time consuming process to find the clips we need.  

Here are the 8 events that we created in order to keep our footage organised.

Before we actually get started on editing the rough cut for Life of Hermit, we decided to go through all the clips we shot during production and choose the best ones so when it comes the official editing, we know which clips to use in order. Although this took a long time, we would find it more beneficial in the future as we wouldn't need to go through every footage we filmed when it comes to editing each scene.

Overall, this was a good start in the editing process as each production member worked well with each other to ensure the right clips were chosen.